feedback from student about my article

after doing one of my early drafts, i gave it to one of my classmates to look over and give me some feedback. most of what he said was positive but he also gave me some things to work on and some things to think about which really helped.

he told me that my intro was great because it sounded interesting and made you want to read on. he also said that he thought that i should use more data to back my argument up with. he said on the whole it's a good article but just has a bit of tweaking that needs doing.